Medan_Is my own town
I love staying in Medan because of these reasons. First of all, there are many malls there, such as Medan Mall and Center Point. In the mall, we can buy clothes and food. Second, Medan also has many traditional food like "Bika Ambon and Tauco". Bika Ambon is a cake and the color is yellow and Tauco is a peanut. Third, Medan has many buildings and 2 international airports. Polonia Airport and Kualanamu International Airport. While, Medan has many transportation and make a problem with traffic jam.
Many cars and motorcycle stopped in a road side. This is also the reason why the weather in Medan is very hot.
Many cars and motorcycle stopped in a road side. This is also the reason why the weather in Medan is very hot.
Hi, Jes :). I think your topic can be made more general. don't forget to put the trasitional words. you should focus on your particular idea. hehe
BalasHapusoh yeah, Foods = food. There is Bika Ambon in Medan ?? hehe
Keep fighting jes hohoho
thank you for your comment Hulda, I will be focus on my particular idea.
HapusHi, Jessyka. I like your story about Medan. It is a wonderful city as you described in your post. By the way, maybe you need to improve the structure of the sentences by adding some transitional words more and recheck the grammar again. But, the supporting sentences really stated the topic sentence that you have wrote. Thank you for posting a great story about Medan, Jessyka. God Bless You always.
BalasHapusthank you for comment Jason, I am going to improve the structur of my sentence.
HapusGBU too
Hi Jess, I don't really get your topic sentence. Maybe next time you can elaborate it more. The other things is the usage of transitional words. I do not see any transitional words in your paragraph, maybe you can add it. Also, the elaboration about the clarification need to be improved. Godspeed Jess, keep writing!
BalasHapusthankyouuu foryour comment Pim.
HapusI am going to improve my paragraph..
gbu
I do agree with Prim; please check whether your topic sentence is related to your supporting sentences. Yet, I see some improvement here :-) I wish you all the best!
Hapus